M: So this is it.
W: Yeah, I guess.
M: It's been nice.
W: Very.
M: I... will miss you.
W: This isn't the last time I'm going to see you.
M: You're sure about that?
W: Positive.
M: But we're 4000 miles apart.. It's not likely I'll see you again.
W: Why are you so negative? Paris is beautiful - I'm going to come back. And you're more than welcome to come to New York.
M: So I WILL get to see you again?
W: Yes.
M: *sigh* alright. Thank you for making my holdiay one I will never forget.
W: No. Thank you. This has been wonderful.
M: I think there's something you need to know.
I think I've fallen for you. Hard.
W: ....
M: What? Ahh I never should have said anything. I'm sorry. I just.. I just thought if I told you now, you'd stay.. I'm sorry. Forget I said that...
(SHE KISSES HIM)
M: So now I'm just gonna kiss you for the millionth time and say "Be seeing you".
(A SECOND KISS)
W: I'm sorry, I didn't mean to kiss you twice and linger on the second one.
M: It's alright. Don't leave.
W: The train is almost here. I have to go.
M: Don't forget about me.
W: I promise I won't. I'll call you right when I arrive in New York.
M: ...
W: Everything will work out. I promise.
M: I know.
W: Well, here's the train now.. I'll be seeing you.
(She boards the train.)
M: Be seeing you.
Dale,
ReplyDeleteThat conversation kept me at the edge of my seat! I want to know if she comes back, if they stay together... I don't know if you have seen Dear John but it reminded me of that movie. Great job!!
-Silver
Dale,
ReplyDeleteRomantic scene. Good job. These are difficult to write without sounding corny. This didn't sound corny to me, it sounded real. You did a good job of capturing that moment when you say goodbye and you don't know what the future holds.
Dale,
ReplyDeleteGood story I liked hearing it in class. I like how you ended it because it leaves it up to us to decide if they ever see each other again
Dale,
ReplyDeleteI like the repeated phrase 'I'll be seeing you'. I relate that to real life, because when you are nervous, or in a situation that puts you at an emotional state you tend to repeat your words and try to stay calm. I enjoyed this my man!
Papa burgundy.