I cry.
Feeling so overwhelmed.
The story of the mad.
Thought I would forget.
It's a singing sin
with an unequal temper.
Begging to be set free.
No.
You have forgotten.
Your dreams have faded.
Can not bear bondage.
Nothing else is.
The final pain, drove him blank.
You held his death in your lap.
I will never forget.
This is really good! I think it's really deep. I like the emotion you put into it. Good job.
ReplyDeleteThis poem is very deep. You can relate it to a lot of different things too. Good job
ReplyDeleteThe beginning of this was really good. I especially loved the lines "The story of the mad." And "It's a singing sin with an unequal temper." Great images there. But towards the end I kind of felt like it was shifting away from the original theme. Still a very good piece. Good Work!
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